Always Never Question
Always laugh
Never cry
Keep on smiling
Or else you die
Terrifying end
Undecided fate
Questions asked
Answers late
What to live for
I cannot say
Breathe every breath
Live every day
Do not question
Make no sense
Leave it a mystery
Or keep it past tense
Live in the moment
Don’t plan ahead
Ignore the future
Present instead
Always laugh
Never cry
Keep on smiling
‘Cause then you die
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alright..ill keep that in mind..thanx!!
I feel like this poem just needs to be expanded by using more detail. The initial message is known, but if you take it and try to add in more life experiences or use metaphors something to make the poem bolder and stronger. I like the start though.
--rach
These are all things we've heard before, just in a list. Why are they more important for this poem? What has changed about them? Look into the subjects a little deeper and flesh things out a little: what kind of terrifying end and undecided fate are you talking about? In this case, the more information presented, the more we're brought in to this universe and the more we can connect. And in all, a poem like this about life really is all about connections, no?
Happy writing!